Here I come, the cleverest oneOne and only Original
Exceeding Einstein in Science
Nobel prize is for me to claim
So amazing so astounding
I'm, even at singing solo
No doubt, I'm better than Norah(Jones)
Madonna and Miley Cyrus
They're all MAD for me, who wouldn't be?
Of course, because I AM THE BEST!
A shiny sparkle* in the sky
People glance up to get a glimpse
The one and only, marvelous
A prodigy , a phenomenon
Flicker and flashes* everywhere
Explanation of the kennings:
- Shiny sparkle=star
- Flicker and flashes=Cameras
Nice job Chanda!
ReplyDeleteI really like your Anglo Saxon poem.
It's easy to grab the hole idea.
However, there are few sentences that did not show alliteration.
But overall, it's very BOASTING!!
I especially like this line
"People glance up to get a glimpse."
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ReplyDeleteI really love your kennings, not only the kennings itself is alliteration, but also I especially like how you relate flicker and flashes with camera, which is pretty clever. However, I don't see the "monster" in your poem. Are you trying to fight your way into Hollywood red carpet? (or, maybe Bollywood? :)) You went pretty crazy for alliteration. I love that, because when I read this poem, it just sounds like a very beautiful rhythm as I was reading through, and it helps me to read it more smoothly.
P.S. Better than Miley Cyrus? Seriously? ;P (you know what I mean :P)
Chanda, you did a great job on your poem, I really like it! You put your poem into three parts with three points to brag about, which made it easier for the reader to get your point. However, some of your sentences have more beats than they should have. But honestly, I don't really care! The kennings and alliterations made your poem sounds really nice. Therefore I think your poem is pretty much perfect!
ReplyDeleteChanda, I really love your kenning, it works fluently well in your poem. Especially the camera which it already do the alliteration itself already. I think you be more specific who you are fighting. The stars or your smartness? But rest of it is really good:D
ReplyDeleteI like your poem in how you compare your greatness to the greatest people of all because you are better than them. I love the use of words in each sentence, especially those you use to point out that you are better than. However though the content is good there isn't much of a concluding part to this poem as a whole. Overall it is a good poem that shows your self-confidence when boasting.
ReplyDeleteHi! Chanda, I like your poem so much. You use simple vocabularies to brag yourself successfully which is really cools dn special. However, there's one shortage that may block you to obtain high score. Dom elf your sentences have more than 8 beats. It doesn't match the tescher's requirement.
ReplyDeleteFor example, part 2, line 2, 4 and 5; part 3, line 2, 3, 5. For part 3 line 5: Flicker and flashes everywhere is my favorite sentence of all. I love the kenning "Flicker and flashes", you totally describe the image of camera flashing. But, as I mentioned above, this line doesn't match the 8-beats-per-line rule, and I think you can change it to "Flicker and flashes all time"
Very alliterative. Excellent job, Chanda! 30/30
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